Tuesday, May 10, 2016

Copywriting is part of a bigger strategy aimed at selling something, in exchange for money, for time, for support and so on. We know that appealing to emotions such as sadness, happiness and frustration works, but we’re grinding this method into a rut. We’re repeating ourselves, and we need new tools.

The world’s great fiction writers invite us on a stroll through an emotional garden, using a complex map of ideas, which over time is gradually folded back on itself into something resolved. Great stories will introduce conflict and danger, tempered with moments of love and happiness. It’s the ups and downs of a story which gets us. It’s the story’s ability to press on some common nerve we all share: love is good, ghosts are scary, and so on.

Sure, novelists have tens-of-thousands of words to bring us to the resolution of their ideas, but that doesn’t mean we can’t learn from their methods.

Here we are going to explore how great stories are structured, and then how to apply that structure to your copywriting. Breaking rules in writing is encouraged, by the way, so feel free to read this post and then disregard everything completely. In fact, drop a comment below about how you structure your own writing – maybe we’ll learn something.

This post is going to help you to:

  • Think about your message as a story
  • Understand why that matters
  • Examine how stories are made
  • Write more fulfilling copy (in that your message is bookended with solid ideas.)

How Stories Are Made

I’m not the first person by a long pitch to outline the common structure of stories – people have been doing it since forever. Kurt Vonnegut, author of Breakfast of Champions (1973), Slaughterhouse-Five (1969) and other books and short stories, describes stories as curves,

Somebody gets into trouble, gets out of it again. People love that story, never get tired of it.


That, and a few other variations are the premise of lots of stories, but we can break it down even further. Think of any famous great story — Moby Dick, Nineteen Eighty-Four, The Green Mile and see whether you can pick out the following structural elements:

A larger scale problem: This is the overarching problem affecting the world in which the story’s characters exist. In Nineteen Eighty-Four, the larger scale problem is a society in which people are cripplingly oppressed. It’s usually a problem, because problems offer more opportunities for conflict and transformation.

A conflicted protagonist: Stories are about conflict, and about attempts by the characters in them to resolve those conflicts. Vonnegut said, “Be a sadist. No matter how sweet and innocent your leading characters, make awful things happen to them, in order that the reader may see what they are made of.”

A threat(s): As readers, we feed on drama. We dislike the threat for endangering the protagonist, but we crave it all the same. The threat is ever-present, always clawing at the protagonist and at the fictional world in which they live. Even in fairy tales, the princess is threatened by a wicked witch.

A transformation: From conflict, comes transformation, the other thing we crave from stories. Transformation — of the characters and their world — comes after they’ve been raised up, knocked down, ground into the dirt, then raised again. We’ve been challenged by the threat, by a turbulent ride, but we’ve reached tipping point and the transformation comes.

Treating Your Copy Like a Story

You can take the elements of a fictional story, and use them to figure out how to present your message. Think of it as building a jigsaw puzzle, then picking the piece which best represents the whole picture.

Here is what you should consider, if your intention is to make your copywriting representative of a larger story:

Is your campaign related to a larger scale problem, idea or state of being?

In other words, what’s the context? What’s going on in the world?

Does your campaign have a subject the audience can root for?

That can be a character, or you can use the reader as the subject – put them in conflict.

What’s the threat?

What’s the thing that’s going to get the blood pumping?

Where does the transformation happen?

This could be where your actual copy lives. Everything else is a set-up for the transformation.

Landing page copy is different to other copy. As well as capturing your attention, it needs to inspire action right away. With a landing page, you need to give your prospects a reason to click in as few words as possible. Most landing pages are built this way, but, we’re trying something new. There isn’t much of it around, but let’s take a look at some examples of landing pages, written with a bigger picture in mind – with a story in mind.


Designed to Move’s landing page uses some pretty standard techniques for stirring your emotions, but it’s for a good cause. The message conforms to some of those core elements we’ve mentioned, which make stories so appealing.

We have protagonists (the children) and we have threats (obesity, disease, etc.) The problem is this idea that children today might die before their parents do. The transformation, then, is up to us. We’ve been put in a situation where there’s only one choice; nobody wants to see children sick and unhappy, so we act.


How about this example from Klout? Here, we’re thrust right into the story as the protagonists. There’s no doubt, this landing page wants you to think about your life and what you’re doing with it.

What’s the larger scale problem? There’s no problem here, as such, rather an idea put forward by Klout that your life might be drifting about around you. It’s not aligning, and it’s not reaching its full potential. Think about this for a second, and now that feeling you have, that’s the threat. The threat of your achievements not being aligned, of them not being fully appreciated, is enough to make you want to sign up, to transform. By reading their message, you’re pulled into your own story, and only you can resolve it.

Nailing That One-Liner

This article is about alternative ways of thinking, right? It’s easy, sometimes, to come up with the perfect one-liner for your landing page or ad’s copy, and sometimes it’s not. Now we’re going to take a look at some of the most famous and effective opening lines in modern fiction.

“Lolita, light of my life, fire of my loins.” – Vladimir Nabokov, Lolita (1955)

Powerful because: We learn something about the narrator, something about the object of the narrator’s affection, and about the tone and content of the story. For those who haven’t read Lolita, let’s say that while the protagonist is conflicted, he’s certainly not conventional, or even appropriate. In spite of the controversy, there’s a world to be imagined from this opener and it’s less than ten words long. Would work great on a landing page.

“It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.” – George Orwell, 1984 (1949)

Powerful because: The scene is set, and something is awry – clocks don’t strike thirteen. Orwell’s opening line goes one of two ways: we imagine a world where things have changed for the better, or one where things have gone horribly wrong.

“As Gregor Samsa awoke one morning from uneasy dreams he found himself transformed in his bed into a gigantic insect.” – Franz Kafka, Metamorphosis, (1915)

Powerful because: It’s menacing, it’s right to the point, and it’s so completely off the wall, that we’d be bonkers not to read on. Vonnegut said, “To hell with suspense. Readers should have such complete understanding of what is going on, where and why, that they could finish the story themselves, should cockroaches eat the last few pages.” Rather fitting. Remember this when you write your own copy.

“All this happened, more or less.” – Kurt Vonnegut, Slaughterhouse-Five (1969)

Powerful because: It’s a classic opener, promising epic tales of misadventure, but with a sardonic twist which suggests a keen eye might be needed. It has some classic storytelling elements, too, namely that we might be dealing with a narrator who’s experienced great trauma or adventure.

“Vaughan died yesterday in his last car-crash.” – J. G. Ballard, Crash (1973)

Powerful because: Who’s Vaughan? Why has he been in more than one car crash? Why does it matter? What makes the start to a great story? There are no car crashes without drama, and we’re bound to be introduced to some pretty traumatised characters later on.

The best one-liners present a curiosity to fret over, or a character to wonder about. The best one-liners hint at a widespread problem and prompt the reader to think about a possible transformation.

The best one-liners, like the best stories and the best copy, are invitations. If you can invite your reader into a world of stories and conflicts and transformations with your copywriting, then you will have created something commercial, with a truly fictional heart. And that, is one more way of writing copy.

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